Description is
the foundation of a vivid story, the kind that plays like a movie in the reader’s
head. Visual description is more important than ever as a staple in a fiction writer’s
toolbox. In this modern media day of iphones, internet and music videos, even
the readers’ perceptions and expectations are changing. Teachers complain that
students don’t have any creativity or imagination any more. They don’t play
make believe games. They play video games. They have become so inundated and
even dependent upon visual media it’s difficult to interest them in fiction reading,
a form of entertainment that isn’t as immediate. It’s not enough to hook the
reader’s attention in the beginning. Ageless classics are written with
well-drawn characters, realistic storylines and vivid descriptions. Today’s writers,
more than ever, need to create evocative scenes with well-paced storylines that
elicit visceral responses from their readers, drawing them eagerly forward
through a story that however fanciful “feels” realistic.
Creating a
story does require imagination, so the first thing you must do to describe a
person, place or thing well is to visualize it. Many writers choose magazine
pictures or stock photos to help them better describe settings or characters.
You have to begin with an impression, getting a feel for what you are about to
describe. Writers are probably among the most observant groups of people in the
world, filling their imaginations with visuals and human behavior.
Once a writer
has the rough draft version of what they wish to describe, it’s necessary to choose
just the right words to convey both a correct and enhanced image. A good
describer doesn’t make the mistake of using just their computer’s synonym or thesaurus
tool to find more interesting, as in less common, words to replace what they’ve
already written. Beginning writers who implement these tools inadequately often
end up using the wrong words, as in incorrect word use, which renders the
description confusing rather than giving it clarity and creating a visual image
in the reader’s mind. One of the handiest tools in a writer’s toolbox, even a
seasoned writer who wants to up the voltage of their creative juices, is a
describer’s dictionary. These handy references include samples of words as well
as phrases to better describe faces, expressions, body types and individual
behaviors, such as gestures or walking habits. They go into detail about such
seemingly simple things as sizes, shapes, colors, landscapes and objects, as
well as more complex details such as skin tone, complexion or the look in
someone’s eyes.
With the rough draft fleshed out the writer has created a “real life” image
for the readers. Now, it’s important to trim the fat. Take out any unnecessary words
or over-the-top phrases and what’s left is a much more interesting piece, one
that will draw the readers in and keep their attention. Use these three steps,
1) get the description down on paper, 2) make the description more vivid with
interesting phrases and vibrant details, and 3) tighten the writing, removing
redundant or verbose words or phrases, and the result will be much better
writing, which means much better reading.
Here
are a couple examples. You decide which ones are the better reading.
He
was a mean and miserly man. Or: "Oh! but he was a tight-fisted hand at the
grindstone, Scrooge! a squeezing, wrenching, grasping, scraping, clutching,
covetous old sinner! Hard and sharp as a flint, from which no steel had ever
struck out generous fire; secret and self-contained, and solitary as an
oyster." - Charles Dickens, "A Christmas Carol"
It
was a dark and stormy night. Or: The impending was inevitable and I could sense
it nearing. Thunder rumbled in the distance and a bolt of lightning cracked the
midnight blue sky into two. Jagged flashes of pure light cast a glow against
the monochromatic background. For the past week, I lay in bed fervently hoping
I'd wake up to the gentle patter of rain on my windowpane, an escape from the
scorching heat; and now, here it was, cascading in diagonal sheets in its full
glory. There was a certain rhythm to the downpour that I caught amidst the wind
unleashing a torrent of its own. The rain exhibited no sign to cease, the
inception of the storm had only just arrived.-Sachi’s published descriptions
Now you can't make every description detailed, or carry both landscape and motivation within a character's description at every turn. Too much of a good thing can also bore your readers. So like a great love scene, writers must learn to use pacing effectively, knowing that detailed descriptions slow down the pace and are sometimes especially effective after a violent or fast-paced emotional scene. Whenever and wherever a writer uses description though, it has to be a well-worn tool in their toolbox.
3 comments:
Good post, Elizabeth. It's important to give the reader enough description to form a picture of the character or setting. But not too much. We want readers to use their imagination to fill in the rest. One of the things I'm having fun with this summer is playing pretend with my 2-year-old granddaughter. Her older (ages 7.5 & 10) helped her build a "spaceship" out of a box and a helmet out of another box.
Great post, Elizabeth! I use my need for visuals as my excuse to scroll through Pinterest too much. :)
Great post!
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